I am a Year 8 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 10 and my teacher is Peta. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Great job on your writing. I like how you chose this topic based on something we all humans believe in and that is our lord Jesus. Maybe next time you could get a buddy to proofread your writing for any punctuation but anyway great job. Keep up the good effort! :)
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Bonjour Aolelei,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your writing. I like how you chose this topic based on something we all humans believe in and that is our lord Jesus. Maybe next time you could get a buddy to proofread your writing for any punctuation but anyway great job. Keep up the good effort! :)
-Shriya from Rm11
Thank you for your feedback.
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